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: Would anyone like to read my original slasher screenplay...
Would anyone like to read my original slasher screenplay...
10 years ago
(December 09, 2008 08:05 AM)
Member since January 2008
Antwan Brown is a middle child of five, heÂs overly an aggressive and belligerent young 13 year old boy with anger problems. He is constantly lectured by his over-protective; Martin Brown (Mr. Brown), father about how the hostile lifestyle that heÂs living will only lead him to disaster and either in jail or dead, he threatens to temporarily send him away if he doesnÂt change his ways. His mother; Sheri, has a secret relationship with AN EX-CON NAMED Rob who turns her on to drugs and threatens to leave her if she doesnÂt get rid of her son; Antwan, who Rob is very wary of. Meanwhile; Antwan ignores his fatherÂs threats and gets into a big fight at school. This gives his desperate mother reason to send him away and continue her secret life with her crack-head ex-con boyfriend. Antwan believes the lie told by his mother that he will only be staying at a detention center for two months, just until he learns how to control his rage.
FIVE YEARS LATER: Antwan is still incarcerated in the youth detention center. He gets regular visits from his father; who has now divorced his mother Sheri. Antwan blames his mother for his wild and violent demeanor in the detention center because she abandon and lied to him. She wonÂt even allow his other siblings to come and visit him. After five years of visiting his son; Mr. Brown has had enough ÂIÂm moving on with my life.Â He walks out on Antwan, before calling him a Beast; leaving him alone and lonely. The last person that still loves him has walked out on him. With that being said; after his father leaves, Antwan SNAPS and breaks out of the detention center; killing anyone in his way in a brutal, vicious manner.
Mr. Brown learns of his sonÂs brutal escape from the detention center. He knows his son and knows exactly where his going and what heÂs going to do. His over-protective, fatherly instincts kick in and he realizes that he must get to his former house where his ex-wife and other four children still live so he can save them. But he soon realizes that in order for him to achieve his goal and save his children from harm and possible death, he may have to do resort to violence, even if it means becoming a beast, just like his sonÂ
What do you think? I've already gotten it copyrighten and stuff. If you would like to read it please send me your email.
Re: Would anyone like to read my original slasher screenplay...
10 years ago
(December 09, 2008 02:45 PM)
Member since October 2007
The way you wrote the synopsis, it's almost as if the "slasher" part doesn't take place until the third act.
Why doesn't his father have any influence over where Antwon goes and for how long? Why wouldn't Rob like him? they both seem like bad people. And why would you name your main character Mr. Brown?
and can a parent really send a child to a youth detention center? For five years? And why would he break out at 18? How long can they keep him there?
Don't tell me what I can't do!